I do not know how to express my feeling. Happy? Or Sad? Maybe very complex I think. This is my first time to write an essay in English. And I know the mark of this essay is very important for us. So it is not just an experiment for us. In fact, I¡¯m not very satisfied with my essay, and there are lots of uncertainty reasons.
When I get the feedback of this essay, I know I should do a lot of work to improve on it. The most difficult aspects for me are how to write a correct reference in each paragraph and how to make my essay like academic writing. I only give the references at the end of the essay, not in the each paragraph. So it is uncertain to know where this information comes from, the most important thing is, maybe it will be thought for a kind of plagiarism. Another aspect is how to make my essay like academic writing. The Chinese criterion for essay is different from British. So I must change my mind and the way of thinking. In china, we usually give the result at the end of essay, but in Britainwe should give the result at the very beginning, in order to make the reader know well what thing I decided to talking about. If I¡¯m not obeying these rules, I can not make the essay have a clear argument and structure.
I have learnt a lot from class. I know how to write reference and the process of writing. Tilly told us if we want to make us essay more academic, we should change some of the informal phrase into academic words and some simple sentences we should change to another way of expression. Moreover, write outline and make notes are very important for us to prepare our writing. Because, when we have a clear idea, we can make an essay have a clear argument and structure.
I will try my best on it. My belief is: No pain no gain.