March 06, 2008

Let's write "Haiku" together!

Recently, with Gerard and Shirley, we have discussed a lot of interesting topics.

Today, maybe it is time for us to have a little break, to relax our mind by writing a kind of poetry- Haiku.

“Haiku” is a kind of Japanese poetry, which only includes three lines and 17 syllables in total. The first line and the third both consist of 5 syllables, while the middle line includes 7 syllables. Before we start, jsut think about one theme to be the main topic.
Here is the explanation of “Haiku” in its own form:

Haiku
Haiku, with seven
Syllables in between two
Shorter lines of five.
(This is from the handout of WSC module- creative writing)

Here are my own “Haiku” poems:

1.Qiuqiu(my dog)

Playing day and night
Sleeping and eating anytime
Dogs live a free life.

2. Birth

Screaming the mother
Followed by a loud crying
It is sound of birth.

3.Home

Our paradise
Mother, father, me, the dog
We are family.

Don’t be shy, just try.
Only need to remember
‘Seven’ between ‘fives’.
(1st line- 5 syllables; 2nd line- 7 syllables; 3rd line- 5 syllables again)


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  1. More examples can be found following the link below
    http://www.toyomasu.com/haiku/#autumn

    06 Mar 2008, 22:43

  2. Yangyu Xiao

    Haha, Shuang, you put forward a challenging topic. :) sounds very interesting~I will come back to it later, tommorrow or at weekend.

    And then I can draw up these points into a dissertation—-the effectiveness of blog writing…if each one of us write one line, then it becomes a collaborative blog writing Just a joke. Do not take it seriously. o(¡É¡É)o I will see whether I could write a Haiku later~

    06 Mar 2008, 23:23

  3. Gerard Sharpling

    Hello again Shuang, and thanks for your kind comments on my recent entry. Many thanks too for inspiring us to keep on writing and to focus on haiku poetry as a moment of light relief. Sometimes in writing, ‘less is more’ – the less we say, the more we say. I hope to post some of my attempts at writing haiku on my blog soon (which I’ll link with your entry). BTW I did enjoy your haiku poetry. I didn’t know a lot about dogs when I was younger by my mother-in-law has one (called Toby). James loves to play with him, and sometimes annoys him and teases him (for which he gets a good ‘telling off’ every now and again!). The other day, James complained to me and said ‘Toby keeps teasing me’ – when the truth became apparent, we found that James kept holding out a squashy toy dog to Toby and talking it away again. There is a phrase which says never work with children and animals! Will be back in touch again soon!

    07 Mar 2008, 09:56

  4. Gerard Sharpling

    Shirley writes -

    And then I can draw up these points into a dissertation—-the effectiveness of blog writing…if each one of us write one line, then it becomes a collaborative blog writing Just a joke. Do not take it seriously. o(¡É¡É)o I will see whether I could write a Haiku later~

    I’d love to work on something like this. Wouldn’t it be great if we all combined our strengths to produce a novel, a dissertation, a play, a book of poems, whatever… the possibilities are endless!

    07 Mar 2008, 10:13

  5. Yangyu Xiao

    That is a wonderful idea, Gerard. (Ps, I do not why my letter always became smaller when I added comments)

    Maybe we could begin to write Haiku—-each one of us writes one line. We can write three ones and to see what we feel in writing different lines. And whether our primary intention is changed by the last writer~:)

    07 Mar 2008, 10:52

  6. Yangyu Xiao

    And….we can also write a complete one but just put the first line on the blog. When all Haiku-s are finished. We can release the whole version and make a comparison. Sounds good?

    07 Mar 2008, 11:05

  7. Haiku, you ku. He,
    she or it kus. We ku, you
    Ku, They ku. Thank ku.

    07 Mar 2008, 18:44

  8. Thanks, Shirley! Sounds quite interesting about your joke. Agree with Gerard, that might be a good idea to do so. Your suggestion is really good, we can create a lot of interesting staff by our creative minds. Looking forward to seeing your Haikus-

    07 Mar 2008, 20:39

  9. Gerard, thank you for sharing your story about playing with dogs and children. I may write about my story with my dog in my future entry. It sounds really cool to have our own work, I’d like to share with you with all my creative writings, if you like. We can think about it and discuss about that in future.

    07 Mar 2008, 20:43

  10. Yangyu Xiao

    Life

    Happy and sadness

    Life is a mystery box

    Grasped in our hands

    07 Mar 2008, 20:48

  11. Hey, Luke, I like your Haiku0 Quite clever way to putting things together!

    07 Mar 2008, 20:49

  12. Yangyu Xiao

    I would like to write a dog too, though it is not my dog and my grandparents’ cats…..I do love animals. Thank you, Shuang, you always throw out lots of good ideas!!!

    07 Mar 2008, 20:51

  13. Brilliant! Shirley!
    I like the theme.

    I¡¯ve got mine:

    Cooking and eating
    Shopping, talking, then Sleeping
    It is the real life.

    07 Mar 2008, 20:55

  14. Yangyu Xiao

    I love your peom, much more relaxable than my poem…and with so many ing-s

    You are very creative!!!

    And look forward to read your story about your dog:) And maybe you can put his picture here too, if you get one.

    07 Mar 2008, 22:06

  15. Gerard Sharpling

    Shuang and Shirley, thanks to both of you. Wow, I feel very inspired. Will write more tomorrow – I really enjoyed your poems. My haiku poetry is still to come. Take care!

    07 Mar 2008, 22:42

  16. Thank you so much for saying so,Shirley-

    as you mentioned about the ‘-ings’
    I think out another last line for that, the whole one could be:

    Cooking and eating
    Shopping, talking, then Sleeping
    Living the real life

    07 Mar 2008, 22:44

  17. Sue

    Here’s mine:-
    The train left
    the station
    in a puff
    of smoke
    magic.
    And here’s one my Mum always used to tell us:-
    The spring has sprung
    the grass is riss
    I wonder where the birdies is.

    I think that one’s quite well known in this country although it may be a west country one because my mum’s a west country girl. It’s quite seasonal anyway. In some ways I think it would be more interesting to share the haikus whcih we didn’t like and discarded, I did that with two that people didn’t like.

    08 Mar 2008, 10:33

  18. George Ttoouli

    The cat paws the glass
    while goldcrests lilt the garden
    always out of reach

    08 Mar 2008, 11:55

  19. Sue

    As the great tit of time
    nibbles through the milk top
    of eternity.

    08 Mar 2008, 22:41

  20. Sue

    We shall not cease from exploration
    And the end of all our exploring
    Will be to arrive where we started
    And know the place for the first time.

    And in the same vein but this one’s by Mervyn Peake (I can’t remember who wrote the first one) who is a great favourite of mine:-

    The vastest things are those we may not learn
    We are not taught to die, nor to be born,
    Nor how to burn
    With love
    How pitiful is our enforced return
    To those small things we are the masters of.

    08 Mar 2008, 22:49

  21. Hello, Sue. Thank you so much for your comment and I like your poems.

    ‘We shall not cease from exploration
    And the end of all our exploring
    Will be to arrive where we started
    And know the place for the first time.’

    I like this one. I think you are right. We need to keep on exploring. I think sometimes, life does like a circle. We always chase something, but when we catch it, we will start again. Every end is a new start though.
    Also thank you for presenting the poem by Mervyn Peake , yes, compare with birth and death, which we are not taught, all the other things can be taught are so small. However, we have no choice with being born and dying, but we could make the process more colorful and meaningful by doing those small things. I think the main point of living is to learn to be tough and brave. Even with a failure, we should be happy that we know what we are weak at; also we should be brave to try what we are not sure or inconfident about, so that we won’t feel regretful at the end of the “enforced return.” I think that is why someone says that when you are dying, all the things you cannot get through will be thought through, such as hate and regret, because at that moment, people will find everything is useless in front of the coffin.

    12 Mar 2008, 00:49

  22. hello, George. Thank you so much for your comment and you trackback link of my entry. Cheers~

    12 Mar 2008, 00:51


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