November 29, 2008

Digging a Hole

Digging beneath dappled shade,
And a chorus of applauding trees.
A sharp-spade chewing sound, 
Metal hum like plucked wire.

Aching back, muddy smears,
And not a blister; just
A certain hardness of the skin,
Cracking like a gourd
Across the wrinkles of my thumb.

         “Why were you digging a hole?”
         She asked me, afterwards.
         “It felt” I answered,
         “Like the right thing to do
         At the time…”

Mulch smell, wet and bodily.
The hole opens, organic;
A ventricle, it gasps.
Fist-sized nuggets, stone hearts
Send sparks against the spade.

I use the steel edge as a pick,
And the earth splits like flesh.
I know when it’s deep enough.
Panting, I watch it breathe,
And revel in the audacity of it existence.

         “If you could bury something in your hole,
         What would it be?”
         “Myself” I said,
         Pretending it was a joke.

Walking back, spade in hand,
Like Neanderthal man,
A girl I once knew sees me;
Scowling, spade, mudsmears,
And thinks I’m going to kill her.

The next day I went back there
And filled it in, embarrassed,
As though it were something shameful.

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  1. Wow. Freud would have a field-day with this one. And I mean that is the most flattering terms possible. This is fantastic. The descriptions, the idea, very very nice. :)

    29 Nov 2008, 18:58

  2. Aww thank you Lesedi. =) The blog ruined my formatting. =(

    30 Nov 2008, 10:40

  3. This reminds me of Seamus Heaney’s “Digging”...except with added sex appeal
    It’s very visceral. I like it.

    14 Jan 2009, 12:01

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