January 06, 2010

Snow draft 1

Writing about web page http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MM7LrsIhWqc&feature=related

Today I wrote a first draft of a poem inspired by the recent snowfall. I first thought of this while travelling on a train from Coventry to Newcastle before Christmas. The fields were white and silent, and we went past a power station in Yorkshire (not Drax).

Also check out Wallace Stevens reading his 'The Snow Man' on YouTube. I hope you can see some similarity.

Again, the formatting's a bit rubbish. Each sentence starting with a capital letter signifies a new verse.

 

Snow, draft 1

 

Shadows frozen in amber

on a canvas of seasons

fringed in barbs,

laced with transparent brilliance.

 

Towers sigh in globes,

crowns grow and fade

on angelic giants

resisting Winter’s blockade.

 

Radiant berries, proud beaks

defiant of snow and frost,

fanfares striking out

at life silent and lost.

 

Fur of fire

fuelled by hunger,

patrolling sleeping skeletons

shrouded in moon blue.

 

Echoes of a presence

disturbs the darkness

and agitates shadows

before returning again to stillness.


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  1. Ali

    Like it lots. Enjoyed ready it. Lovely soupy words. The only thing I like a little less is the last line for some reason!

    06 Jan 2010, 18:48


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