haiku
We did haiku too. They are fun and short so I did quite a few. I like the images they create in general and it was fun trying to remember enough Japanese from the course I took last year to write one in Japanese.
O sakana wa Oh the white fish
Aoi mizu de iru Is in the blue water
oboemasen It doesn't remember
White foam of the waves Fog is cold and damp
Stands out brightly in the dark Shrouding everything in gray
Of the vast ocean Sunlight shimmers through
A puffy white cloud Rain spatters the ground
Floating above the great earth The droplets dotting the dust
Reflects in the lake Smell of soil released
The air is smoky Wind blows the orange leaf
The dust covers everything Through the clear frosty air
Dark sky and red sun Across the green grass
The rainbow glitters Tall brown cliffs are touched
In the mist at the fall’s base By the clear azure water
Thundering water While the sun beats down
The brilliant blue sky
Encompasses the mountains
Imposing and gray
La gemma verde The green bud
E` piccola ma cresce is small but grows
sara` la foglia It will be the leaf
01 Nov 2007 13:29
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some nice images here, although maybe perhaps you could experientment a little bit more with your adjectives. I would also change the line ‘The fog is cold and damp’ to simply ‘The fog is cold damp’ which I think is a little more interesting, and fits the 575 scheme of the poem better.
13 Nov 2007, 16:38
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