October 15, 2007

Poetry: Jacket

Hello again, my readers,

I have been neglecting you and this page. Please forgive me, for I had cruel reading and planning to do. I am still working on the projects I described earlier. The epic poetry is coming along well, and I'll have something complete to post in a while. The play is moving slower than expected but should materialise at some point. Otherwise, great.

I had some trouble coming up with part 2 of this week's assignment, the poetry set out in boxes like a comic strip. I have a lack of inspiration for this form, so I adapted a poem I had created over the last few days and wrote it in this form. I think it works, but it isn't fantastic.


Based on real events, folks. Hope you enjoy.


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  1. George Ttoouli

    This is worth developing. Without the conventional ‘cartoon panel’ structure to follow, there is room to play with the order in which words are read.

    Try breaking it down further into a grid format, perhaps using a spreadsheet. Put one word in each box and use layout as you’ve done here to try and distort conventional reading patterns. Here is an example in a similar fashion, but better – it moves too! http://gistsandpiths.blogspot.com/2007/06/selections-from-life-of-conway-by.html

    The words in each frame are patterned according to the ‘Game of Life’ created by mathematician John Conway.

    20 Oct 2007, 17:17

  2. I think it is ok and that “whilst” is not too fancy since I saw “whilst” used in the instructions on how to use the kitchen in my flat, which is no literary work. I guess it is just British, heh. I like how the poem moves and that you can hear the bee. Never thought of the word “yellow jacket” being a discovery though.

    25 Oct 2007, 13:13

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