March 15, 2012

Keys

I live alone and keep all the doors locked. Before I enter a room I first knock politely, then slide a key in the lock, twist until the click, and then turn the knob. I received my first shock in twenty-three years when, while sitting at the kitchen table, I heard a door slam. I double checked every room. Knock, keys, lock, click, turn. Nothing peculiar in any of the rooms, beds made, carpets spotless, curtains drawn.

Next morning I did the rounds. Knock, keys, lock, click, turn. I was satisfied that nothing was amiss and sat down to eat. Then with the second shock in as many days, I heard a creaking sound as if someone was treading on the stairs leading to the top floor. I ran up, no one there. I did the rounds: knock, keys, lock, click, turn, knock, keys, click, turn. All the rooms were empty and silent. I had a headache and my mouth was dry. I spent the rest of the day in bed.

I did not do the rounds next morning. I stayed in my bedroom with the door and windows locked. The ticking sound made my head hurt so I took the clock off the wall and smashed it to pieces. I closed the curtains. I suppose a long time had passed before I heard voices coming from the living room directly below. I rushed down, my hands shivering violently as I tried to find the appropriate key. Knock, keys, lock, click turn. The room was empty. While I was closing the curtains I heard whispers in the kitchen, and more coming from upstairs, and I saw shadows in the garden. Knock, keys, lock, click, turn, knock, keys, lock, click, turn, knock, keys, lock, click, turn, knock, lock, click, keys, turn, knock, keys, lock, click, turn, empty.


- One comment Not publicly viewable

  1. i really like this, especially the effect of the repetition of ‘knock, keys, lock, click’ etc. it really built up the suspense and made a great conclusion, as well as being very effective in terms of sound combination. The first sentence is also very engaging and makes the reader want to find out more about this character.

    15 Mar 2012, 15:16


Add a comment

You are not allowed to comment on this entry as it has restricted commenting permissions.

March 2012

Mo Tu We Th Fr Sa Su
Feb |  Today  | Apr
         1 2 3 4
5 6 7 8 9 10 11
12 13 14 15 16 17 18
19 20 21 22 23 24 25
26 27 28 29 30 31   

Search this blog

Tags

Galleries

Most recent comments

  • i really like this, especially the effect of the repetition of 'knock, keys, lock, click' etc. it re… by on this entry

Blog archive

Loading…
Not signed in
Sign in

Powered by BlogBuilder
© MMXXI