v – Vetriano
Bend her back
Light her cigarette
But not yet
And let your hand
Creep up her thigh
Try
Not to wonder
That the charge
In the air
Like breath
On your neck
Is there
Like iron filings
A tang of copper.
Fingers slide over skin
Slip in
Feel her quiver
With some emotion
You shiver
To feel.
this really, really works for me. i would love to know what this is about – cos im sure its nothing like my reading which makes this excellent.
09 Dec 2005, 19:07
I think I know where this is from. Very cool. For me, the enjambment feels slightly forced in the middle stanza, but works brilliantly the rest of the time. Nice one.
09 Dec 2005, 23:50
Ok, this is mainly inspired by a Jack Vetriano print that I have as my desktop at the mo. It's in my Inspiring Paintings gallery (look left) – it's the one called "Night Geometry"
Glad you like, guys. It makes me happy :)
10 Dec 2005, 01:52
Quite enchanting, thankyou.
12 Dec 2005, 01:21
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