i – First Frost, 19/11/05, Galactic Teabag

November 19, 2005

Sultry Angel Eyes
Fog outside
Hot fire in crisp
Green-grey air
And my dark hair
Partially in my eye

The view like country
House and garden
Waugh, Vetriano
That Poliakoff one

A moment is a moment
Autumn
Both here and there
In frost-filled air
Strains of saxophone
Just as much home
Then as now.

ooh, nice

19 Nov 2005, 14:19
I love the short lines, but watch out for cliches and unnecessary use of colour-words.

19 Nov 2005, 16:55
personal thing – but yes, seeing as one of my chief concerns with poetry is it sounding nice – the use of names i don't know is enough for a poem to totally miff me.

but on the other hand i like the mystery…

14 Dec 2005, 17:10
Waugh = Evelyn Waugh
Vetriano = Jack Vetriano, Scottish painter (see gallery)
Poliakoff = Stephen Poliakoff, writer for stage and screen. Did Perfect Strangers and The Lost Prince

14 Dec 2005, 21:27

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