Meditations on a Pot–plant
Palm frondsIn the afternoon
Cast shadows like fingers
Reaching for something.
Who knows what the shadows
of plants want?
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05 Jan 2006 16:45
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A lovely image. The crux is in the last two lines, but they are not phrased quite right. "In the afternoon" is superfluous.
Try making a cinquain? i.e.
2 .. syllables
4 …..
6 …...
8 ….....
2 ..
07 Jan 2006, 12:49
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